TYWA 2020 Nomination for The Read-Worthy Prize Grace

 14 - THE DAY FIRE RAMPAGED

Favour Grace Alioke lives in Mowe, Ogun (18 years old). This story was slightly edited for grammatical accuracy and to better serve TGF readers. The originality of the story is 100% intact.

The sun was standing still like the policeman at Ayikara junction, making your clothes wet with your sweats as Haija was weaving your hair into six backward cornrows. Mama Halima ran into your compound, shouting, "Wuta! Wuta! Wuta tana ko'ina o! Fire! Fire! Fire is already everywhere o!"

Maybe you would not have believed it if you didn't see people running helter-skelter, some clustering into one another, some pushing others away; if you didn't stretch and see fire tearing down a building.

You jumped, as if frightened by a ghost, clasped your two-months old baby that was crawling on the floor, and started running too. You didn't even look back to check for Haija or Mama Halima, you just kept going where your legs were leading you, or perhaps, where the crowd was going.

Some bodies were already blazing, some were on the floor, unable to stand up, but who cared about them when everyone's life was in their frail and shaking hands?

Dust and smoke swirled into the air and mixed with everybody's daze and blurred your sight, but your legs were still moving. How would you surrender yours and baby's life to death?

You kept running and running till someone, probably, people, pushed you and you landed on the floor, inhaling dust and smoke. You screamed and struggled but the indistinct chatters swallowed your voice and your baby's cry.

You screamed again but someone stepped on you as he or she was running. A short hiss escaped your mouth. The dust started filling your nostrils and mouth. The crowd had already made you their foot mat. A drop of blood fell from your mouth when you coughed and everything started becoming black, but your baby's cry was still tingling your ear. 

You opened your eyes and a fair lady in a knee-length white gown and nurse cap smiled at you. You looked sideways and saw injured people on the hospital beds. You tried raising your arms but pains clutched it to the bed and drip.

After the nurse adjusted the drip and helped you in sitting up, because you insisted on sitting up, you asked her what had happened and she told you some armed Fulani men attacked your village, Kimbori, and Apiashyim for an unknown reason.

You asked after your daughter and the smile on her face faded. She pouted and wagged her head.


Review: This would give you goosebumps or keep your eyes frozen as you read. It is intriguing and insightful! -TGF team.


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Comments

  1. So sad. Beautiful piece in few words. Weldone, Grace❤

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  2. I love all your pieces Grace. This one definitely stands out. Keep winning

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  3. You have consistently proved your prowess’ excellence. This is a beautiful piece Grace, I’m proud of you.

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  4. I love the story. It captivates my mind.
    More grease, Grace

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  5. Beyond just reading the words, my mind was active. I could paint the picture of what you were trying to pass across through your deliberate words, despite that I still wanted to read the end. You have my thumbs up ma.

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  6. This is really nice. I was literarily in the piece.

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  7. Awesome piece, you are doing well Grace

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  8. Amazing!!! Kudos.

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  9. I love this piece, its so beautiful
    Keep up the good work

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  10. Well done grace for this great job

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  11. This is beautiful, Grace.

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  12. This is amazing.
    I love how you used the figurative language; it kept glued to the end.
    Excellent work Grace.

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  13. Well done Grace. More wisdom and grace to you in Jesus' Name!

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  14. A very vivid detailed account of events. Keeps your imagination active

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  15. Oh my! How I wish she did not lose her babe.

    Well done Gracie! You won my heart 😍

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  16. Lovely story Grace. You surprised me. Keep it up

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  17. Reading this story over and over again, keeps making more sense to me. You did really well sis

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  18. One can literally feel life in the story, good work dear.

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  19. Gracey!
    You've grown so much...
    Such a beautiful piece..

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    1. 😍😍😍😍😍. Growth! Growth! Growth! I'm happy for growth. Thanks so much both of you.

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  20. Wonderful piece.
    Keep the fire burning.
    Congratulations already.

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  21. I see Chimamanda everywhere in this short story. It's so descriptive and intriguing. A great work dear.

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  22. it really amazing
    keep it up dear

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  23. This is so touching... It captivate me
    More grace...

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  24. Nice piece, it is really amazing

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  25. Nice write up, keep it up

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  27. Beautiful.

    You do much more, Grace!

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  28. This is a job well done. Keep it up, Grace.

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  29. Interesting story and sad at the same time.....keep it up....

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  30. Interesting Piece... I love the way the writer exposed the death of the protagonist's child in the most subtle way.

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  31. Wasn't expecting a sad ending honestly, this tells you the writers' ability to surprise...

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  32. Really Creative!
    Was held till the end

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  33. Great write... It's original

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  34. I can't believe she lost her baby

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  35. Strong voice, Interesting plot... A great read!

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  36. This is a great work, Grace. I love the way you glued me to the end. And please, next time, write happy stories. 😀😀

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  37. It's amazing how you made me to quietly read every word of the story with rapt attention. Nice work 👌

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  38. Grace, finally unleash the God given potential in her and also propel me to do more hard work in writing. Thanks for the encouragement and the piece... This worthy reading and enlightening

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  39. Nice piece
    am inspired keep it up sis��

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  40. I love the way you glued me to the end. Keep it up, Gracey.

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  41. Great work here, Grace.

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  42. I'm very proud of you, Grace! Your consistency has proven to be the key to mastery. Keep it up!

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  43. Good work! Keep writing.

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  44. What a nice write up keep up the good work

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  45. Good job Grace, nice write up

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  46. Hmm. This story is just making me sigh. Sad story, but beautiful weaving of words.

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  47. Sad but interesting story. Keep it up.

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  48. Shit! Shit! She lost the baby! Nooooo! I can't believe this.��������������������. Arrrggh!

    Good plot. Good storyline, though I don't like how the baby died.

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  49. This is a work well done, Grace.

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  50. The world will read you, Grace. YoureY a writer with great potential.

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  51. Wow! Grace, comman teach me how to write naaww. Lol.
    Nice work here.

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  52. Sad. Sad. Sad. But I like how you made it interesting.

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  53. This is why I am against Biafra. It will just increase loss and sadness. People need to read this and come off the notion of Biafra. It will create more loss.
    Forget my story. Lol. Great work here. Write more! I can't wait to read you again. And please don't forget us when you blow.

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  54. ����������������. Good one.

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  55. What the person above said is true. There should be no Biafra. Ehnic hatred should be stopped. It will prevent unnecessary loss(es).

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  56. Interesting story, Grace. You are doing well.

    I agree with what the notion of no-Biafra, but I think we should focus on tjis story, not Biafra.

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  57. Hey up there,I commented on Grace's work. Did you read it well?

    The loss made me remember Biafra so I don't think talking about Biafra is bad.

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  58. Hey there, I never said itsi bad. My statement read simple: "Focus on the story"! Please, don't conclude if you don't understand someone's point. Thank you.

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  59. Hey up there, you must be a funny and angry person at the same time. Lol.

    Never meant to argue, Grace. I remain that good boy. ����

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  60. Good boy indeed. I see it in you. I laugh in Spanish.

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  61. This is just a real story. I love the way you added emotions.

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  62. Grace, you need to be read the more. You don't just write, you write fire. Keep writing Abba's heart.

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